Umm... so Galen got carried away with reading the Babylon 5 parallel universe story?
Most curious.
Most interesting, I would have to say.
You may not know, but I'm a person who usually hates fantasy. I have tried to read some, but miserably failed. Mention magic without a hint of science behind it -- and the Shadow part of my personality immediately gets nitpicky, totally destroying my ability to enjoy a story.
That said, the parallel storylines of your story had the balance exactly right. I could follow the fantasy storyline without objections, without skipping parts and even enjoy it. I may assure you that this happens very rarely. Thank you!
Your story is most interesting.
I wish you many good ideas and hope to see more!
Aside from that, I have one technical suggestion. The name of your HTML file has spaces in it. I would recommend removing them. Not all browsers like spaces in URL paths. Mine opened it, but some may not.
[This message has been edited by Lennier (edited January 27, 2002).]
