The subject explains it all, and i don't know how many of you will like it, so far, the chapters are short, and the story, many of you may not like, but i wanted to do this, and put it in a place where it could be accepted, so without further ado, here is my currently unnamed fanfic's first chapter:
Chapter 1:
It is the Earth year 1244, as we are in the middle of our dark ages, there are other races that are prowling the universe, barely aware of our existence, yet barely aware of the great presences around them, and completely unaware of there importance in the coming years.
As a vessel jumps out of Hyperspace and approaches the primary space station above the glorious planet, the captain asks a channel to be opened to the station.
"Channel open captain," said the communications officer.
"Captain Tovol to station prime, respond, this is Hazi-22 to station prime, come in."
"This is Station Prime, commander Selav, what is your destination?"
"Typical, always trying to boss us around, it's our planet as well, very well, our destination is Station Vahlanah, to meet with our central command, urgent business, give us clearance now or be reported."
"You think you can scare us, we know how you are, sacred this, and holy that, hold on while we process your information, uhh... the central computer is running slowly today, it... may take awhile."
"Dammed soldiers, whoever said they can control the military, we have just as much rights to our planet as those guys do, slow computers today, right, they just want us to sit out here waiting for them to give us approval, just to try and show us who's in control."
The first officer, who controlled communications, then spoke up, "yes, it's ridiculous captain, why did our people ever agree to this, it isn't right, they shouldn't be allowed to do this."
"Simple, we were tired of fighting among each other, and they had people who were just waiting to fight, it's there way, it isn't right, but it got most of them out of our cities, most of them are up here now, we've given them something to do."
There was a repeating low chime, and then the COM officer spoke, "captain, incoming message from Station Prime, we've been cleared to proceed to the other side of the planet and to Station Vahlanah."
"About time, proceed, and next time, Lenar, remind me to wait until we're on the other side of the planet before jumping to normal space, a day will come when the Warrior caste no longer tells us what to do. It won't be too far off, our people have had to live under these conditions for over 300 years, our people are growing restless, even the Religious caste has it's limits, I just hope I die before we begin fighting among ourselves again."
Lenar, the first officer, responded, "yes sir, 10 minutes until we reach the station, and sir, there are 3 Torvan Heavy Cruisers following behind us, 5 minutes back, checking, their destination is our station as well."
With a surprised look on his face, Captain Tovol said, "Torvan's, those are warrior caste vessel's, why would they be coming to our station for, they couldn't possibly know, we haven't even told the caste elders yet, this is unnerving, full speed, I want to get there as soon as possible."
"But Captain," said Lenar, "the regulations say to only go at half speed when in planetary grid."
"Warrior caste regulations, we need to get there fast enough so that we can tell the caste elders before they arrive, and like I said, they made that regulation, they won't break it."
"Yes sir, we will now arrive in 3½ minutes, the Torvan's are continuing to approach at ½ speed."
Chapter 1:
It is the Earth year 1244, as we are in the middle of our dark ages, there are other races that are prowling the universe, barely aware of our existence, yet barely aware of the great presences around them, and completely unaware of there importance in the coming years.
As a vessel jumps out of Hyperspace and approaches the primary space station above the glorious planet, the captain asks a channel to be opened to the station.
"Channel open captain," said the communications officer.
"Captain Tovol to station prime, respond, this is Hazi-22 to station prime, come in."
"This is Station Prime, commander Selav, what is your destination?"
"Typical, always trying to boss us around, it's our planet as well, very well, our destination is Station Vahlanah, to meet with our central command, urgent business, give us clearance now or be reported."
"You think you can scare us, we know how you are, sacred this, and holy that, hold on while we process your information, uhh... the central computer is running slowly today, it... may take awhile."
"Dammed soldiers, whoever said they can control the military, we have just as much rights to our planet as those guys do, slow computers today, right, they just want us to sit out here waiting for them to give us approval, just to try and show us who's in control."
The first officer, who controlled communications, then spoke up, "yes, it's ridiculous captain, why did our people ever agree to this, it isn't right, they shouldn't be allowed to do this."
"Simple, we were tired of fighting among each other, and they had people who were just waiting to fight, it's there way, it isn't right, but it got most of them out of our cities, most of them are up here now, we've given them something to do."
There was a repeating low chime, and then the COM officer spoke, "captain, incoming message from Station Prime, we've been cleared to proceed to the other side of the planet and to Station Vahlanah."
"About time, proceed, and next time, Lenar, remind me to wait until we're on the other side of the planet before jumping to normal space, a day will come when the Warrior caste no longer tells us what to do. It won't be too far off, our people have had to live under these conditions for over 300 years, our people are growing restless, even the Religious caste has it's limits, I just hope I die before we begin fighting among ourselves again."
Lenar, the first officer, responded, "yes sir, 10 minutes until we reach the station, and sir, there are 3 Torvan Heavy Cruisers following behind us, 5 minutes back, checking, their destination is our station as well."
With a surprised look on his face, Captain Tovol said, "Torvan's, those are warrior caste vessel's, why would they be coming to our station for, they couldn't possibly know, we haven't even told the caste elders yet, this is unnerving, full speed, I want to get there as soon as possible."
"But Captain," said Lenar, "the regulations say to only go at half speed when in planetary grid."
"Warrior caste regulations, we need to get there fast enough so that we can tell the caste elders before they arrive, and like I said, they made that regulation, they won't break it."
"Yes sir, we will now arrive in 3½ minutes, the Torvan's are continuing to approach at ½ speed."